Wednesday, March 23, 2011

Sami Fuentes
Mrs. Boresen
Expository Writing, P-4
Definition Essay
March 4th, 2011
Pride
My mom has always been the most influential person in my life, and it means the world to me that she is very proud of me. I will never forget the first time she told me she was proud of me; it gave me an awesome feeling, a feeling I would love to feel again. As I grow older and make decisions in my life, I keep my mom in the back of my mind because knowing I will make her proud makes my life so much easier. Pride is not just something that happens; it is built over a period of time throughout life. Having pride is the state or feeling of being proud, and is also a sense of personal worth, according to (dictionary.com). It is possible for people to have pride in different matters in completely different meanings. Because pride can cause a huge reflection upon any person’s life, pride is a high or inordinate opinion of one’s own dignity, and importance(www.merriam-webster.com).
            According to word-origins.com, the original Old English noun for “pride” was pryte, a derivative of the adjective prūd “proud” (ancestor of modern English proud). The word pryte was developed into pride over time. The word prūd first applied to groups of lions in 1486, but it was not commonly used until c.1930 (dictionary.com). Pride is and was commonly used to describe what our soldiers had and have for our country; they take pride in what they do. We as citizens take pride in our soldiers, and we are very proud of them and what they have done for our country. We take pride in them because it is a very important position that they are in when on the battle field. Pride is a feeling of honor and sense personal worth.
            People may have pride in their families, and friends. Many parents take the most pride in their children. The children have the ability to make their parents very proud in what they can accomplish. Every day as the children grow older, they overcome many obstacles in their life, and as they learn and grow from these problems in their life, it makes the parents most proud. It is often heard that a parent may say, “My kids are my pride and joy,” and this means that the children bring them happiness and also that they make them very proud. The adults take most responsibility for their children, and raise them with a sense of personal worth.
            The word pride is used to describe the feeling of being proud and taking in dignity for what it is worth. In athletics pride is a very strong word used to describe what teams may have. The athletes take pride into their teammates and also their coaches. Being a part of numerous volleyball teams, I have had the chance to feel the pride of my teammates and also coaches. The past few years, my high school volleyball team has been very successful, making it to the state championships, and making it to at least the top four final teams. Over the seasons, I began to develop faith and pride in my team. We had the opportunity to spend numerous hours together learning and growing as a team. We would win together, and we would lose together. Some games we had better than others, but at the end of the day we would all take the punishment together. We learned to trust each other, and become closer even off the court. Developing pride is one of the big opportunities we had. Having pride in my teammates was one of the best feelings I have ever had. Being a senior, and one of the team captains, I was so proud of my teammates for making it as far as we did. We were one of the best teams in the whole state of Colorado. Because we performed at our best, had respect towards each other, succeeded, built great relationships for each other, and were proud of ourselves we really knew what it felt like to have pride as a team. Our coaches were very big supporters throughout our multiple seasons, and taught us what it took to succeed also developing pride from each player on the team. Our coaches were the ones to push us, to become a team of pride.
            Families and teams are not the only ones capable of having pride; teachers are also ones who take a lot of pride in what they do, and also in their students. Every year teachers get a new group of students to teach and grow with. As teachers gain a relationship with their classes they also gain respect for them. They become very proud of the students and what they accomplish by the end of the year. The students gain more knowledge, and teachers feel good about what they do. They take pride in helping, and teaching children. Since pride is a sense of personal worth the teachers feel very good in the field of education.
            It reflects on the character of a person and how much self-respect they have, and it may even say a lot about their self-esteem.(www.merriam-webster.com) Anyone can have pride, and anyone is capable of losing it. People may often say that they cannot do something because they have too much pride. When this is heard, it means that they do not want to lose the self respect, or personal worth that they have within themselves. When a person has pride it is a great deal of satisfaction. One example of someone losing pride would be to do something that they are not most proud of and to disappoint is the reason for losing pride.
          Because pride can cause a huge reflection upon any person’s life, it reflects on the character of a person. Throughout the life of a person they gain pride in themselves and others. They become very proud of what they believe in, and their pride builds on their character. The confidence of a person comes from the pride they have within themselves. The importance of pride is huge and has the ability to make or break a person’s personality. People often have pride in their culture, their race, and sometimes in their gender. Pride is a high or inordinate opinion of one’s own dignity, importance, merit or superiority.(dictionary.com)























Work Cited

"Pride | Define Pride at Dictionary.com." Dictionary.com | Free Online Dictionary for English Definitions. Web. 25 Feb. 2011. <http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/pride>.

"Pride - Definition and More from the Free Merriam-Webster Dictionary." Dictionary and Thesaurus - Merriam-Webster Online. Web. 28 Feb. 2011. <http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/pride?show=0&t=1298915644>.

"Pride - Definition of Pride by the Free Online Dictionary, Thesaurus and Encyclopedia." Dictionary, Encyclopedia and Thesaurus - The Free Dictionary. Web. 25 Feb. 2011. <http://www.thefreedictionary.com/pride>.

"Pride - Word Origin and History." Word-Origins.com – History and Etymology of Words. Web. 25 Feb. 2011. <http://www.word-origins.com/definition/pride.html>.

1 comment:

  1. Sammie: I think that you had the general idea of how to write this essay, but you are lacking the ability to organize your thoughts, use transitions, combine sentences, and use advance word choice. I would have liked it if you used more specific details in your essay to describe your main points instead of going so quickly from point to point. You will like writing more if you focus on this technique. A great example of a good place to do that would have been your introduction, where you talked about making your mom proud. Telling a story and then being specific on how it made you feel , would have made this essay more interesting from the beginning and more fun to write. According to the rubric, here is your final grade:
    XXWriting is generally focused on the task; contains some support that appeals to the audience
    XXOrganizational pattern is evident; may lack a logical progression of ideas
    XXProvides some support; does not elaborate all ideas
    XXSome sentence variety and good word choices; shows some mechanical errors
    XXHeading, Times new roman font, 12 font, double spaced, 1” top and bottom margins and 1.25” sides,3 pages.
    Overall grade: 163/200

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